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While we slept,
you strapped your arm around
my chest like armor and possession,
like ‘this one belongs to me.’ Together, we are
teaching the things that haunt us
to lie down in their graves.

Here, like this
your demons say to mine as
they demonstrate the art of behaving.
Together, we secure their
broken bodies and set them into six feet of
downward motion.
        (but we do not follow
           we cannot go in their stead)

They do not know they’re dead. It’s
always a blow when we break the news.
They find themselves jealous of our
human skin and our inhaling
                                 exhaling chests.
(we are too kind
to show that we are more alive without them
   that losing them is not a loss)

But they sleep after many lessons and
much persuasion, and then
      so do we.
For Jenny, who holds me in her sleep.
Who holds me cities away, and brings me lemons and pens.

For Jenny, who I cannot scare away.
She is why I stand up straighter now.
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Teachers to the Dead by =nonamepsalmist. 'A beautiful poem that shows the power of conquering our demons together.' ( Suggested by LineCount and Featured by PoeticWar )
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Stop-Drop-N-Roll Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2008
Beautiful poem here - I love the way you put things. I love how simplistic it seems on the outside, yet the deeper meanings hidden within.
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up-up-up-up-up-up Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2008
I think... I adore your writing. Especially this beautiful piece. It speaks volumes.

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BirghtEyEz Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2007
This is beautiful.

You have a gift.
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nonamepsalmist Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2007   Writer
I have a curse of a blessing.
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BirghtEyEz Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2007
Interesting way of describing it. Care to elaborate?
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Winterfang Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
"my chest like...possession," I really like that line, because "possession" isn't...that idea wouldn't typically be phrased like that, in "proper" Enlgish, but it makes so much sense, and it's quite elegant.

"set them into six feet of
downward motion." I enjoy not only that you're using "downward motion" instead of "dirt" or "earth", but also the...the action the scene presents, the visual of it.

"human skin and our inhaling
exhaling chests." That's just beautiful, and the placement and lack of words between "inhale/exhale" bring to mind meditation, the long space where you're just holding your breath, for a still moment in between the action of life.

This is gorgeous and elegant, and it's one of the better poems I've ever read. It makes me hope.
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sirannon Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
This was just marvelous. I wish I could write like this. I really felt it.

Thank you.
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Aquarius21294 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2007
Together, we secure their
broken bodies and set them into six feet of
downward motion.


^I like that part.

Great job.
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InfiniteJest Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2007
Sending love out to all the writers on DA.
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mekisyo Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2007
its beautiful
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