I have written us down, typed us up, and sent us out.
they will edit us, and say some parts are no good.
but I want your run-ons, your lack of punctuation; and you are so easy
on my weak binding, my damaged spine.
I have written us down, typed us up, and sent us out. they will edit us, and say some parts are no good. but I want your run-ons, your lack of punctuation; and you are so easy on my weak binding, my damaged spine. |
Daily DeviationGiven 2008-11-12Manuscript by ~nonamepsalmist is a short, yet sophisticated love poem with an interesting metaphor. (Suggested by =vix0r and Featured by `lovetodeviate) |
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Comments
i like the first part especially.
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Be inspired: *simplypoetry and *simplyprose.
Words recycle, you know.
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Take me anywhere- just not out of context.
"I'm pithy."
Sounds so sad.
but thank you.
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Take me anywhere- just not out of context.
Really tender, yet still a bit sad
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I(now) = I(now - Δt) + Δt ∙ I(now - Δt) for Δt → 0
more often than not, they sound better the third or fourth time around- a better fit (i'd apply a metaphor, but it'd be redundant)
Metaphors never go out of style.
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Take me anywhere- just not out of context.
i find that my english teachers try to ruin them for me.
That will make them leave the poor metaphors (and you) alone.
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Take me anywhere- just not out of context.
If you'd prefer, though, you can think of it as concise, succinct, tiny-but-mighty, short and sweet... or whatever else floats your crank.
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Be inspired: *simplypoetry and *simplyprose.
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